Friday 28 September 2018

Sports explanation


Why sport is important?
Introduction: Is sport important? I believe it is. Sport dates back to ancient times 760 BC to be exact and it is still here today. But why is it important? Well, Sport involves fun, it keeps you healthier and it develops your social skills. It is played across the globe but why is it so exciting.
Paragraph 1: Sport involves a substantial number of variety and it is played all around the world. I believe that is because it is fun. Why would anyone do it if they didn’t enjoy it? It is a great way to make friends and also helps you in other situations like the workplace or school. It is also great for your health.
Paragraph 2 : Exercise is great for you health. Its proven that sport can lower the risk of health diseases and help your brain functions become greater, and parts of your brain bigger but most importantly keep you at a healthy weight. Statistically over 86% of New Zealand adults over 15 are obese and NZ is also the third fattest country in the world. We are also the 14th laziest country in the world too.
Paragraph 3: Sports is a great way to build teamwork skills. Is also help children in their adolescent years grow their sympathetic and leadership skills.On the sports field you have to play with people you may and may not like and that is why sport is such a great way to learn, because no matter where you go or where you work there may be one person that you have to put up with.
Conclusion:In conclusion I believe that sport is great because it involves fun, keeps you healthy and makes you a nicer person. You don’t have to be the best player on the team but you have to try. After all Michael Jordan got kicked out of his school basketball team when he was in Highschool but now he is one of the best players in the world! Here are my reasons why sport is important. By Sami Donaldson

3 comments:

  1. Dear Sami,
    I am so impressed with your explanation writing. Firstly I am impressed because you are showing greater maturity in your writing compared with the beginning of Term 3. Your style of explanation writing as demonstrated above shows you have learnt an important writing skill (explanation writing) needed for high school and beyond.

    Specifically you have linked your paragraphs together through the use of topic sentences and written a succient summary.

    Your next step would be to write as well as this on a topic with which you are not as familiar.

    I hope your mum and dad have a chance to read and talk to you about this piece of learning with you.

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  2. kiaora My name is Shawn from Red Hill School and you have done a lot of work. Do you like sport cause I do it's a lot of fun doing sport with friends and other people that are nice is sport important to you well it is to me most of the time. Next time show me someone playing sport

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  3. Hey Shawn, Yes I love sport! I play League, Athletics and I love doing all the school sports to. What do you play? Thanks for the comments and feedback!

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